Tuesday, March 8, 2011

Cat Tien Memories

Before the Cat Tien field trip, wasn’t only me but the whole grade eight were all excited. We talk about it almost every day, waiting for every second until Tuesday and there the beginning of our journey to the Dreamland. But as soon as we arrive, everybody looked kinda disappointed and hopeless. We walked a lot, and we did mostly walking every day at there, since there wasn’t any transportation except for bicycle and boat. But it was generally not a bad place to stay for four days, and I was really enjoying the trip.

The very first thing that I remembered the most about Cat Tien was the second day when we were there. I was in group one, so our team went to the Bau Sau Lake first. The guider, who was to me, a very annoying and didn’t - know - how - to - treat - his – costumers in a nice way, because he was always complained about us when we walked slow. Of course TEN KILOMETERS were not easy for city people like us. But that wasn’t what I really appreciate to remember. What I felt funny about was that the guider told us, “When we get to the lake, you will be able to see crocodile”. Turned out, there wasn’t any crocodile, and that made us walked ten kilometers in the jungle for nothing. Our students were really pits, and in conclusion, we asked the school to pay us back the money for the Bau Sau Lake’s visit. We didn’t receive any money back, obliviously, but that was a great excuse for us to have the rest of the afternoon free when we got back to our dormitory.

Speaking about dormitory, here is my second best memory. It is about my roommates, Liz and Tien. Right in that day, the second day at Cat Tien, we had gotten a camp fire and ate the marshmallows. It was 8 o’clock or so. We were burning our marshmallows and sat really near to the fire. It was quite cold there, so everybody gathered around the light spot to keep themselves warmed. We had that moment together until 9:30’. That was when we suppose to go back to our room to get changing and cleaning. By 10 o’clock was when we needed to go to sleep, all the lights needed to be turned off. Unfortunately for us, when we came back to our room, the first thing that hit my eyes was the frogs that jumped out from the bathroom. Liz was right behind me. I screamed and she didn’t know why. Based on girl’s feeling, Liz just ran to the door and opened it, as we rushed out to Mr. E’s room, our guardian teacher. So long, we spent the half an hour just to look for those frogs, but they disappeared to nowhere. Mr. Michael was there too, and he also helped us to find those creepy creatures. Tien went back later than us, just about 10 minutes, or so. No one told her that there were frogs in the rom. As soon as she knew it, her scream made Emily’s room, Kristine’s room, and Justine’s room had to yell out ‘Shut up’. Since that day, I didn’t afraid of any bugs and hairy legs spiders, even when I see them. That was awesome!

To be attended to this trip is my honor. Although Cat Tien field trip was the very first long days trip for me, also for AIS, but because of that, our friends got a chance to be closer together. Beside, live 4 days without parents is freakin’ splendid. I am waiting forward to see another field trip like this in the future. Peace!

2 comments:

  1. Word choice: I think I've used as many descriptive words that I could think of. Some of the parts, the words were pretty common so they were kind of boring to read.
    Sentence Fluency:Mine flow pretty well. I wrote it as it followed the chronological order. The sentence didn't really mixed up since i broke it to many sentence in one paragraph.
    Organization: My entry got dived in to 4 paragraphs. Introduction, the the 2 middle one are my memories and the last one is for conclusion and my thoughts.
    Proofreading: There will be some grammar mistake, since i am not good at this. generally i used all past tense, and the spelling had been check in Word.
    I think i deserve 10.5/12

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  2. Word Choice: Yes, you've used a lot of colorful descriptive words which makes it real intrigued to read your post. But you shouldn't use slangs or so.

    Sentence Fluency: Your sentences are overall short but simply awfully great. It conveys the message in the most exciting way every time you add a transition word (especially the incident about the spider, your transition words just make it sound creepier)

    Organization: Perfect organization! Chronological events! Flawless!

    Proofreading: There are some grammar mistakes and misspelled words.

    You totally deserve a 10.5/12 - agreed :)

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